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Re: Love
This is really cute! But my heart wouldn't be able to beat anymore, if It didn't belong to you This is my favorite part. I usually hate poems like this ...
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Re: Heart Slap
This is an amazing poem that I really connected to & I know other's will be able to as well. In my life you were not a quick phase You ...
Aug 31, 2011 -
Re: Concentrate.
I like this a lot. I couldn't help but think of the WWI & WWII when reading this poem. It is gripping and chilling. Scared, shivering, shouting, Sceptical; awaiting a ...
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Re: Bird of Flight
This is really really great! The skies call,The valley sings,The forest whispersSecret things This part was my favorite. I spend a lot of time outdoors, so this really spoke to ...
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Re: 313
I have absolutely nothing bad to say about this. Honestly, it's quite amazing. I was hooked on the first line: Brazilian rosewood, back and sides, Hard-Maple top unfinished. Clock ticked ...
Aug 30, 2011 -
Re: Deleted (I dont know how to delete on this new design of YWS)
I really like this poem. Poems like this usually irk me, because they are overly sappy that I can't help to just role my eyes...(and no..I'm not a jaded girl ...
Aug 30, 2011 -
Re: The night I died (did I really die?)
This was amazing!! It had the perfect amount of suspence, which I loved. I felt like being trapped inside an unknown realm from which there was no escape. My fate ...
Aug 30, 2011 -
Re: Little Fleas
Okay, this is very raw and needs some work. For one it's way too bland for my liking. I wanted a little more suspence, and a lot less discription. Although ...
Aug 30, 2011 -
Re: The Sharing In Power
I like this and I see where you were going with it. But you have to hook me with the first sentence. Starting off with: I looked outside the window. ...
Aug 30, 2011 -
Re: 14
Last night the thunder shook me.the hum of the vibrating windowpanes Wonderful my dear! this evoked such an image in my head...mostly because I love storms. Loved your rhythm. It ...
Aug 30, 2011 -
Re: 12
as a child I used to wonder why the night was feared wasn't it the time the stars came out? and the time for the cracked moon to reign? Talk ...
Aug 30, 2011 -
Re: Is it love or another high school crush?
First I am going to compliment your writing skills, because you are a great writer. Raw..but I see the greatness in it. However; I read this and I felt like ...
Aug 30, 2011 -
Re: Removed
This is....Great!! No. Wait. Stop. I stop in that quiet street and think at the thought. When will I have a life of my own? I have it already dammit! ...
Aug 30, 2011 -
Re: Goodbye
Okay, first I must say that I really enjoyed reading this. Your first line: There’s a big difference between telling yourself something and actually believing it. Sometimes you don’t realise ...
Aug 30, 2011 -
Re: A necklace
I actually really really like this! However you did lose me here: Well fuck, he said. And stood up and bent down, scuffling on the hardwood.Thunk-thunk.I’m really sorry, he said. ...
Aug 30, 2011
